高分网 > 高考 > 高考英语作文 >

高考英语满分作文点评4篇

时间: 文桦2 高考英语作文

  高考英语满分作文点评一

  【试题回放】

  实现有效的沟通,建立良好的人际关系,不仅要善于言表,更要学会倾听。请你根据下表中所提供的信息,写一篇题为 “Being a Good Listener” 的英文演讲稿。

  为何倾听表示尊重,增进理解,建立良好的人际关系

  谁来倾听家长倾听孩子理解孩子,消除代沟,……

  老师倾听学生了解学生,满足需求,……

  同学相互倾听增进友谊,互帮互学,……

  怎样倾听(请考生联系自己拟定内容,列举两至三点。)

  注意:

  1、 对所给要点,逐一陈述,适当发挥,不要简单翻译。

  2、 词数150左右。开头和结尾已经写好,不计入总词数。

  3、 演讲稿中不得提及考生所在学校及本人姓名。

  Good afternoon, everyone.

  The topic of my speech today is “Being a Good Listener”.

  Good listening can always show respect, promote understanding, and improve interpersonal relationship.

  Many people suggest that parents should listen more to their children, so they will understand them better, and find it easy to narrow the generation gap; teachers should listen more to their students, then they can meet their needs better, and place themselves in a good relationship with their students; students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.

  What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others. Show your respect and never stop others till they finish their talk; show you are interested by a supportive silence or a knowing smile; be open-minded to different opinions even though you don’t like them. In a word, good listening can really enable us to get closer to each other.

  Thank you for your listening!

  【名师点评】

  这是一篇感情真挚、热情洋溢的演讲稿,文中大量运用排比句型,不但准确流畅地表达出题目中所提供的信息,而且体现出作者熟练运用英语的能力以及不俗的文采。第三段中所使用的相同结构的复合句式,将倾听的对象及其作用阐述得淋漓尽致;而第四段中用一系列的祈使句议论应如何倾听,则更进一步地增强了这篇演说稿的说服力。

  积累卡片英汉互译

  好词

  1.promote v .促进 2. interpersonal adj.人际的3. generation gap. 代沟4. open-minded adj. 虚心的

  好句

  1. students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.

  同学之间应该互相倾听,这样他们可以互相学习和帮助,也会形成友谊。

  评析:复杂句的组合,被动句的使用。

  2. What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others.

  我想强调的是我们每个人都应该更多的倾听他人。

  评析:复合句的使用。

  高考英语满分作文点评二

  【试题回放】

  假设你是卜曼宜,你购买了一部某外国公司生产的手机,因有质量问题,要求该公司更换。请根据下列要点,用英文写一封电子邮件。

  要点:1. 问题:手机不响铃,不能发短信;该产品已售完,无法更换;型号新,无配件,无法维修。 2. 要求:公司应尽快予以更换。

  注意:

  1. 词数为100左右;

  2. 参考词汇:配件—— spare part;

  3. 电子邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好(不计入你所写词数);

  4.已给出的电子邮件的开头和结尾不得抄入答题卡。

  Dear Sir,

  I am writing to you for the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought on 20th Apr.2008 at Tele Mall in Wuhan, P.R. China. Ten days after that, it didn’t ring and send short messages. Then I took it to the seller, but was told that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one. I had no choice but to go to the repairman. To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. I was so desperate on hearing that for I can not wait that long. Therefore, I have to require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month.

  Thank you for your consideration.

  Sincerely yours,

  Bu Manyi

  【名师点评】

  本文内容要点齐全,语言丰富,结构合理,如头两句说明了购买手机后发现故障的情况,中间部分说明了无法维修而必须让公司更换手机的原委,最后明确提出自己的要求,明白流畅,将题目所提出的要点全部表达清楚,较好的完成了任务。全文以一般过去时为基调,结合主动语态与被动语态,并使用了so, but, therefore 等连接词,使文章结构完整严密。固定短语,如be sold out ,at least, had no choice but to go, to my disappointment, on hearing that 等的使用,使文章的语言显得地道而精炼。

  积累卡片英汉互译

  好词

  1. disappointment n.失望 2.desperate adj.绝望的3. consideration n.体谅

  好句

  To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts.

  令我失望的是,他说因为在中国是新款手机,所以没有配件来修理。

  评析:复杂句的组织; to my disappointment, 常用短语。

  高考英语满分作文点评三

  【试题回放】

  假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华,为校刊英语园地写一篇题为“Our Spring Outing” 的英文稿件。 请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序,叙述上周你们班从准备春游到春游结束的完整过程。

  注意: 词数不少于60.

  提示词: 游乐园 amusement park 垃圾箱 bin

  Last Thursday, we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing. We came up with several choices such as going boating, climbing a mountain, and going to an amusement park. Finally, we decided to go mountain climbing.

  The next day, we set off early in the morning. While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view . However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels. Then we started to pick up the litter and put the rubbish into the nearby recycling bin and non-recycling bin respectively.

  We were tired but happy.

  【名师点评】

  本情景作文的内容要点如下:1.讨论;2.爬山;3.检拾别人的垃圾;4.投放垃圾。内容要点可用不同方式表达。本文覆盖了所有内容要点,较好地完成了试题规定的任务。其中,写作主题突出,详略得当,应用了较多的语法结构和词汇,而且有效的使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文机构紧凑。本文叙述清楚,描写细致,准确运用了很多富有表现力的词和句型,例如:“set off early”,“enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view”, ”were shocked to see litter here and there “等,将活动的情形很形象地描述了出来。

  积累卡片英汉互译

  好词

  1 set off 出发 2. litter n.废弃物 3.respectively adv.分别地

  好句

  1.While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view .

  在爬山时,我们享受着温暖的阳光和美丽的风景。

  1. However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels.

  然而,当我们登上山顶,被眼前的一幕惊呆了:瓶子和香蕉皮这样的废弃物到处都是。

  评析:细节描写,生动形象。“shock”一词也用得生动传神。

  高考英语满分作文点评四

  【试题回放】

  一家宾馆新开业,为吸引外国宾客,希望在互联网上进行宣传。请你用英语为其 写一篇文字介绍。主要内容包括:

  1.地点:距白山入口处500米;

  2.房间及价格:单人间(共20间),100元/天;双人间(共15间),150元/天;热水淋浴;3.餐饮:餐厅(中、西餐),咖啡厅(茶、咖啡);4.游泳池:全天免费开放; 5.欢迎预定。

  注意:1.词数100左右,开头语已为你写好;2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

  Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!

  Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.

  500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, it provides single person room, of which the price is RMB100 yuan per day and the number is 20, and 15 double person rooms, with a price of RMB 150 yuan per day. It also provides hot water bath service. You can enjoy both Chinese and western food in the restaurant and drink coffee and tea in the cafe. The swimming pool is open for free the whole day. All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. So come to enjoy yourself!

  Welcome to book rooms in Baishan Mountain.

  【名师点评】

  本文开门见山,首先点明了主旨。本文最大的特点是应用了很多比较复杂的句式,使文章比较出彩。开头使用了独立结构交代宾馆位置。which引导的非限制性定语从句的使用也很正确。总地来说,文章句式精炼,是篇不错的满分作文。

  积累卡片英汉互译

  好词1. provide v.提供2. convenience n.便利

  好句All these services can bring great convenience to you and are

  very enjoyable.所有这些服务都会给你带来便利,并且非常的愉快。

  评析:bring great convenience,带来便利。

33416