高考英语作文点评:Green Action in Our Class
英语是通向国外的桥梁,下学期就要成为高三学子的你,是否还在为自己的英语作文而烦恼呢?高考英语作文是英语中拉分与提高分数的重要一城,必须做到不容有失,以下是学习啦网小编为你准备的高考英语作文赏析——Green Action in Our Class(附点评)
【北京卷】
【试题回放】情景作文
假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华,为响应绿化祖国的号召,你班四月十二日去郊区植树,请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序,介绍植树活动的全过程,给某英文杂志的“绿色行动”专栏写一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”为题的英文稿件。
注意:词数不少于60
提示词:郊区suburbs
April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering . After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and beautify our environment.
【名师点评】
本文是设计巧妙的提纲要点式作文,与环保结合,立意较好。文章思路清晰,要点连贯,在语言的表达上选词新颖,同时运用了分词短语作状语等较好的句式表达。