教你写高分英语作文：书面表达之文字提纲式(2)

　　教你写高分英语作文的书面表达之文字提纲式4.【2015·广东】

　　基础写作(共1小题，满分15分)

　　你接受了一项写作任务，为英语校报写一篇科技报道。

　　[写作内容]

　　请根据以下信息，介绍国外医疗行业出现的一项新技术。内容包括：

　　*唾液样本：saliva sample

　　[写作要求]

　　只能用5个句子表达全部内容;

　　[评分标准]

　　句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章连贯。

　　【答案】

　　第一节DNA Detection

　　Wecan use saliva sample to detect whether people have major illnesses, predictwhether people are particular about food and remind people to take properexercise. People should pay 125 pounds for it. It takes four to six weeks tofinish the report. After detection we can realize we should strengthen ourbodies. It may cause too many worries.

　　【解析】

　　试题分析：对于基础写作用5个句子概括医疗新技术，要求必须用上所有的要点，不能遗漏。对于概括短文大意，要抓住要点。叙述自己的班级情况时：1.仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息。2.根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态;就本文而言应该用一般现在时态及一般将来时。 3.注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点。

　　【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种句式和结构。比如Iwill explain to them that studying hard is very important运用了宾语从句，以及Sallywas a teacher.who taught some students full of problems.定语从句。副词Therefore的使用使文章内容更具有层次感，也使语言更加连贯。

　　【考点定位】考查提纲作文。

　　【名师点睛】本题所给用5个句子概括医疗新技术的材料是学生不太熟悉的内容，所以要尽量使用学生熟悉的句式来写，还必须用5个句子表达所有的信息。此题主要考查阅读概括能力及语言的组织的能力。需要用一些高级句式及词汇来增加文章的亮点。

　　教你写高分英语作文的书面表达之文字提纲式5.【2015·陕西】

　　书面表达(满分30分)

　　假定你是李华。在校报英语专栏看到了学校“英语文化节”的一则招募启事，请阅读启事，并根据写作要点和写作要求写一封应征邮件。

　　Volunteers Wanted

　　Our annual English Festival, which will beheld on June 15-17, 2015, is now looking for 20 student volunteers to provideservice for Talent Show, Speech Contest, and English Debate. If you areinterested, please send an application email at your earliest convenience toMs.Chen at chenlaoshi@aef.com.

　　写作要点：

　　1.表示写信意图;

　　2.陈述应征目的;

　　3.说明应征条件(性格、能力等)。

　　写作要求：

　　1.邮件词数不少于100;

　　2.开头和结尾部分已写好，不计入总词数;

　　3.可根据情况增加细节，使行文连贯

　　4.不能使用真实姓名和学校名称。

　　Dear MS Chen ,

　　I’mLi Hua, astudent from Class2, Grade 3. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

　　Looking forwardto your reply.

　　Yours truly,

　　Li Hua

　　【参考答案】

　　Dear MS Chen ,

　　I’m Li Hua, astudent from Class2, Grade 3. I’m writing to apply for the position as astudent volunteer.

　　Ireally want to obtain this precious opportunity because, by offering myservice, I will be able to improve my organizational ability, communicationskills as well as my confidence in speaking English in public.

　　Asan outgoing girl, I get along well with my classmates. Besides, I have such agood command of English that I am elected as assistant to my English teacher.Successfully, I have lent a helping hand to her in several English activitiesof my class, which have been appreciated by both teachers and classmates.

　　Iam sure that I can perfectly live up to your expectations. I will be gratefullif you could give me a kind consideration.

　　Looking forwardto your reply.

　　Yours truly,

　　Li Hua

　　【解析】

　　试题分析：本篇书面表达属于英文书信，根据提示可知需要结合“英语文化节”的一则招募启事写一封应征邮件。写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读招募启事，弄清招募职位所有信息和要求;2、根据写作要点从三个方面写应征邮件。写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写。3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态;就本文而言应该用一般现在时态。 4.注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点。

　　【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种句式和结构。比如I have such agood command of English that I am elected as assistant to my English teacher.运用了so…that…句型，以及定语从句I have lent a helping hand to her in severalEnglish activities of my class, which have been appreciated by both teachersand classmates.。此外，文章还使用了大量短语，如applyfor the position, as well as, in public, get along well with,,have such a goodcommand of, lent a helping hand to, live up to等。插入语Besides，以及副词Successfully的使用使文章内容更具有层次感，也使语言更加连贯。

　　【考点定位】考查提纲作文

　　【名师点睛】这篇作文类似于读写类作文。首先要读懂招募启事，抓住重要信息。再结合提纲写作。内容贴近学生的生活，学生有话讲。也富有实用性。对学生的交际能力也会有所帮助。

　　教你写高分英语作文的书面表达之文字提纲式6.【2015·四川】

　　第三节 书面表达(共35分)

　　71.假如你是李夏。你看到美国留学生Sharon 在网上发贴，.希望有人能帮助她提高普通话(Mandarin)水平，她可以教英语作为回报。请根据以下提示用英语给她写一封电子邮件。

　　1.表达给她提供帮助的意愿;

　　2.说明你能胜任辅导的理由;

　　3.给出讲好普通话的两点建议;

　　4.提出你学习英语的具体需求。

　　注意：

　　1. 词数120左右，开头语已为你写好;

　　2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯;

　　3. 文中不得透漏个人姓名和学校名称;

　　HiSharon,

　　This is Li Xia. I learned from your post thatyou want to improve yourMandarm__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

　　【参考答案】

　　Hi Sharon,

　　This is Li Xia. I learned from your post that you want to improveyour Mandarin. I am quite interested in it . I think I’m fit for it. As astudent, I have been learning Mandarin for many years. In addition ,I amChinese, which means Mandarin is a must for me to communicate with others in mydaily life. So I’m quite confident thatI can help you learn Mandarin.

　　Learning Mandarin takes time, so if youwant to learn it well ,you should spend much time practicing Mandarin everyday.As the saying goes, practice makes perfect. Besides, you can also read somebooks in Chinese、see some Chinese films and listen to some Chineseradio programmes. Speaking and listening are very important for a languagelearning, by which you are sure to make great progress.

　　In your post, you say you can teach Englishas a reward. It is just what I want. I’m eager to improve my English. So, ifyou allow me to help you learn Mandarin, you can also help me improve myEnglish.We can contact each other by video chat every night for half an hour inEnglish and half an hour in Chinese, so that we can improve our oral speaking.

　　Hope for you early reply!

　　Yours Sincerely

　　Li Xia

　　【亮点说明】本文要点齐全，结构完整。使用多种句式，如定语从句：I amChinese, which means Mandarin is a must for me to communicate with others in mydaily life.、表语从句：It is just what I want.等。还使用了大量短语等。

　　【考点定位】考查提纲类作文

　　【名师点睛】书面表达考查大家所熟悉的提纲类作文，我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来. 动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题。本作文中给出的要点比较具体,故需要准确表达.写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。

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